The incel as proletariat draft 1

trying to watch this video without letting your eyes wonder is harder than it looks

Maybe if the sound effects were quiter but its really good!

I think there are too many sound effects. Other than that, it looks really good!!

I think it's funny

I hope I'm not too late. I do agree that there are too many sound effects and transitions, but they do seem to get better as the video goes on. I think just trimming some of the fat will do because there are some good edits in there. I think one or two revises would do. I really love the script and concept so definitely try to publish it.

100% monetised!

Not the biggest fan of the sound effects, I feel like 95 percent of them aren't really needed like the transitions or when every Jreg would slide across the screen, I did like the sound effects when they did help like the fire effect or during the "incels are the proletariat of sex. Editing aside, I do appreciate when you talk about inceldom versus other youtubers who do it, as most of them do it with absolute disdain or pity, you seem somewhat more understanding that outright mocking them isn't the most productive thing to do. If you are interested in this topic, Dr.K of HealthyGamerGG has interviewed several incels with some interesting results.

Extremely cursed. Good job!

Lumina

Either too many sound effects or the effects are too loud compared to your voice. Other than that seems good

mandragara

1.03-1.04 - during transition you are still. It lasts for half a second but it looks weird 3.35-3.36 - your face on the left is blurry I would have cut the first abs zoom - the “class traitor” joke is hilarious but it is overshadowed by the first “abs zoom” I would have left the text you are saying but cut the zoom at 2.05 Wacky sounds are grossing me out though (which is good, it works very well), but there are too much of them for my taste Oh, and I’ve barely understood what are you saying in the last sentence about the sex gulags, had to scroll the video back, but it might be my issue (English is not my first language) other than that - great video, good editing, loved it

bit to much sound effects, otherwise fine

i liked when you showed up in jeff bezos' eyeball the noise made me laugh

lydia

I love the "sexis" joke. Easily the highlight of the video.

Moonsweater

Ye maybe like, slightly less generic sound effects Using soundbites is really popular/less generic

Lol I am not overly attached to having shitty greenscreen I should probably just invest in more space and better lighting soon soon Same editor Jah

Greg Guevara

at 3:16, the curve of the mask around you outgrows jeff's eye. for the other eye, it was effective in making it look like you were in it. However, the curve going further than his eye distracts from the effect and looks weird in comparison to the other eye. other than that, the editing is fine. I know it's kinda your vibe, but if you shoot at a higher fps, your keylight effect (greenscreen) will be better. but again, it is your brand, so i definitely get not wanting to do that. also, is this the same editor as the "jreg" video? feels like a similar vibe

Cas Gustafsson

I also thought of bill wurtz what

So, Is Bill Wurtz your new editor?

I agree with the less sound effects comments, otherwise good, like the new style

Needs more "Home Improvement Grunt." But I thought the change of style kept it fresh. The only thing was that the sounds only served as a transition for movement, and there was really no sounds during the development of ideas. It kinda just went *silly sound* talking for a while *silly sound*. I dunno what would make it more immersive. The visuals were fun, and made made me UWU

Miguel Perez

Maybe not every transition needed a sound effect, but whatever style you go for that's cool.

remm

What about the drag queen?

wasps

Nice to see homocommunist make an entrance. I may have to leave homonationalist

Wasabi Flavored Cocaine

Jesus Christ he is ripped.

weareronin

Yes

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