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The Calamitous Bob 40: Unexpected

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Yeah individual chapters have a lot of typos, better read the grouped chapters I posted after that.

Mecanimus

Some quick edits: Gomogog is the dark god of flesh, renewal, and hunger -> (Does this need the capitals that all the other gods have? It feels less like a title and more like a description in context...) (also "Dark God" or "dark God"?) e the sign of Enttikku, goddess of death. -> Goddess of Death. The insane hunger of their masters spreads -> master(?)(the "master" is Gomogog, right? so just one.) “I see so that’s why you wanted me to join. -> "I see, so “Ok. ok..” -> “Ok. Ok..” (not an edit) Denerim counted the number of limbs -> (How did nobody manage this before?) Denerim precised, having anticipated this sort of reaction -> ("précised" I learned a new word, thanks.) Lady Varska, the resident witch, -> (Is she a "witch" or a witch? I thought she had a formal magical education.)

Nicholas Paterson

Mine is on Marruk.

Avery Aderyn

And so the plot thickens, All right taking bets on if it's the housekeeper now

Jacob

Thank you!

Andrew


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