Game Night pg17...
Added 2018-10-17 17:47:57 +0000 UTC...One more page!!!
So much awkward on one page. ^^
I'm not 100% sure about this page, specifically panel 2. I sketched it out in a number of different ways and this was the version with the most energy. Still not sure it's the right look though as I don't think Ellie would just shove her new friend into an uncomfortable situation (she knows she's not good in social situations). I like the look of the panel, but I may have to redo it in November.
November will be the month that I work on the script for part 2, but I'll also being going back and making corrections and edits to the comic thus far. Nothing major, a lot of typos and there's six panels that I want to replace. I also have some ideas for a few bonus comics, of course. :)
Comments
Getting rid of the lines might be the perfect fix. Thanks!
Stereoscope Comics
2018-10-18 06:50:53 +0000 UTCI agree with the second to last panel being a bit much. Maybe if it showed them close together. Like more intimate, that could help make it flow better.
kou32
2018-10-18 00:05:16 +0000 UTCI’m happy to see her change her mind and join in. As for the second panel I can see Ellie being overjoyed to have her new “friend” come back. I wasn’t a fan of the outward lines, they makes the action look more violent then friendly.
Odiumed
2018-10-17 22:28:01 +0000 UTCThat makes a lot of sense. It actually fits in with a later storyline. It is a great example of one of Ellie’s “faults”. Thanks! I’m feeling better about this.👍
Stereoscope Comics
2018-10-17 20:55:53 +0000 UTCNo, I appreciate it! And a valid point. :)
Stereoscope Comics
2018-10-17 20:54:12 +0000 UTCAlthough, rethinking what I wrote... Ellie could be too happy and eager to introduce her new friend. Therefore the energy does fit... And it can always be a sub(sub)plot to say sorry for doing it... or not... XD I'm rumbling... stop me!!!
Raven-rj
2018-10-17 20:52:07 +0000 UTCI like the page as is. But maybe the ending pages doesn't need much energy since we had plenty on the last few. My opinion and please feel free to discard it.
Raven-rj
2018-10-17 20:45:26 +0000 UTCSoon! ٩( ᐛ )و
Stereoscope Comics
2018-10-17 18:20:43 +0000 UTC*dies from suspense*
foogee
2018-10-17 18:15:30 +0000 UTC
