CC2 Chapter 9!!
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Awesome! Love it so far. Here's some potential typos I've found: "By the time they reached him, nearly all of the [affected] rabbits fell to the ground" "Nine [a.m.] game-time?"
Kai Kuchenbecker
2018-05-01 13:48:50 +0000 UTCNo idea what you are talking about. ;)
Dakota Krout
2018-05-01 10:11:02 +0000 UTCIs it just me, or is a Bunicorn just an impaler?
grant pflum
2018-05-01 02:31:09 +0000 UTCIs it just me, or is a Bunicorn just an impaler?
grant pflum
2018-05-01 02:30:26 +0000 UTCHahaha, can relate : Joe was really having fun right now, he remembered when he had been considered an awkward introvert. He had increased his social ability by quite a bit, and now he was just called ‘strange’. "
Ludovic Migneault
2018-04-30 13:01:01 +0000 UTCAh, the good ol' number 9. My 3rd favorite number as it's the 3rd number divisible by 3. Finally read all the chapters. Having a really fun time doing so. May have stayed up longer than I planned, but worth it. It's fun watching Joe grow and get a better grip on things. As an avid MMO player it really strikes a chord with me as he's trying to learn things and chooses to do them the hard way, only to find out it's easier and better to do the same thing a different way *Sigh* many hours wasted on my own stubbornness in the past. Thanks for the great reads, look forward to 10!
IhasaBangBang
2018-04-25 12:01:51 +0000 UTCAdded it, thanks! It does flow better :) No tamer skills yet :P
Dakota Krout
2018-04-23 18:34:40 +0000 UTCLove it, as usual. This sentence reads akwardly to me. ". It seemed that the Bunnicorn was even rarer - and therefore expensive - than he had expected." I think you could stick a 'more' in front of expensive and it would help? I was hoping for a tamer skill lol!
Amber Dehn
2018-04-23 18:27:11 +0000 UTCIt'll show up again, I'm sure :) This is also an introduction to swarm leaders... (Foreshadowing)
Dakota Krout
2018-04-23 14:07:23 +0000 UTCBeware the Bunnicorn. Though honestly I was hoping it would turn into his pet.
Bob of Doom
2018-04-23 14:03:48 +0000 UTC
