The Conceptual Deck - Chapter 8 - Just Desserts
Added 2022-01-10 14:54:38 +0000 UTCI hope you enjoy the early chapter! Please note that a while complete re-write is unlikely, and I will attempt to keep edits to grammar and typo corrections, the chapter isn't final until its published online!
Comments
Maybe gloves as a further backup. Some two part epoxy (concept: 2 parts to activate effect) plus tazer (concept: incapacitating shock) so it only shock if he gets both hands on target so he doesn't accidentally shock things he doesn't mean to. Focusing on the "incapacitating" aspect of the shock could handwave any possibility of over shocking/stressing the target and accidentally killing someone.
William H
2022-01-13 01:15:42 +0000 UTCNice to see him starting to get on his feet. But I think he needs to make him self a close hand weapon. Even a baton or bat mixed with some hand tazers would work. Also adding pepper spray as a second feature to the gloves would work too.
Eldenguy
2022-01-11 06:14:26 +0000 UTCThe rewrites I was referring to only applied to the early chapter. I won't be rewriting any content already posted to SB/SV. Once something is posted on those sites it's the final version. The early chapter has already gone through my usual final edits as well, but isn't what I would consider to be set in stone yet. The likely hood of me drastically changing anything is very very small.
Robert Meta
2022-01-11 00:36:38 +0000 UTCJust finished, very nice! A rolodex and a remote control might have helped as well for sorting arrows, could be added as a silent option.
William H
2022-01-11 00:32:28 +0000 UTCJust to throw out my 2 cents. I personally dislike rewrites since I don't read the SB/SV posts so seeing something here and then the "final" version having something different throws me off. Do you plan to post any "v.2" as separate posts here? I know that helps me. Thanks for the chapter, love the story. Always nice to see well written MCU stuff, especially after the source material decided to take a dive on quality.
William H
2022-01-11 00:23:26 +0000 UTCHonestly I’d say don’t worry about having to rewrite or anything. Part of the charm of being early is that we know that things might change and we’ll be here to see how and why. That being said, just do it however you want. Don’t worry about us. Now I’m gonna go read the new chapter, so thanks!
Trent Cannon
2022-01-10 20:33:46 +0000 UTC
