SotD Concepts: WtD Deleted Scene

Here's a deleted scene from Speak of the Devil: Wake the Dead - Part 1!

This was originally going to be pages 8-10. While I liked giving some action to the opening scenes, I really hated how cheesy it was to have Sunday literally save someone's pet.

I ended up scrapping the scene entirely and replacing it with something more quiet, and hopefully a bit more subtle storytelling.

Also, a special treat since I don't usually post any of my scripts. Here's the original script for the deleted scene:

EIGHT

Panel 1: Sunday exits a bus in Riverside, hurrying off the bus to meet her date.

Panel 2: I big happy bulldog rushes in.

Panel 3: The bulldog runs past Sunday, startling her. It’s leash is flapping in the air behind it.

Panel 4: A woman runs past (a Whisp using a metal “Mech” body, basically a robot suit) trying to catch the dog. She is unsteady on her feet. Sunday watches her pass by.

• 1: Whisp Mech Woman: Ah! Come back! Someone help!

NINE

Panel 1: Sunday dashes past the Mech woman, determined to catch the dog.

NO COPY

Panel 2: Sunday’s hand grasps the leash quickly.

NO COPY

Panel 3: Sunday slows down with the dog so the Mech woman can catch up.

• 1: Whisp Mech Woman: Oh my god, thank you.

Panel 4: Sunday hands the leash back to the woman while the dog hops around happily. The woman looks exhausted. Sunday isn’t happy.

• 2: Whisp Mech Woman: I’m so embarrassed. I just bought this new Mech body today, it’s my first one. I’m so clumsy with it.
• 3: Sunday Blackburne: This is dangerous for your pup, you need to be more careful.

TEN

Panel 1: Sunday tries to leave, but the Mech woman meekly tries to get her attention.

• 1: Sunday Blackburne: Now get on home, it’s almost sundown.
• 2: Whisp Mech Woman: Right, that would be bad. Wait! Can I... ask you something?

Panel 2: Sunday stops and looks back to her.

• 3: Sunday Blackburne: What?

Panel 3: The Mech woman continues to shyly question Sunday, but Sunday rubs her head and tries to figure out what the woman is talking about.

• 4: Whisp Mech Woman: Uh… Have you heard of a place called Jack’s Lantern? You look like the kinda girl that might know.
• 5: Whisp Mech Woman: I’m trying to figure out how to get there myself.
• 6: Sunday Blackburne: No, what is it? Sounds like a pub or something...

Panel 4: The Mech woman quickly turns and waves it off quickly.

• 7: Whisp Mech Woman: Nevermind, it’s fine! Thank you!

Panel 5: Sunday raises an eyebrow at this, confused, but not curious enough to stop her.

NO COPY