【進捗報告】新刊16ページまで

20250107

あけましておめでとうございます！今年もよろしくお願いします！

随分と空けて申し訳ありませんでした。ずっと作業はしていたのですがあまり進捗は芳しくなく…。新刊に傾注いているためリクエスト消化や日々の落書きはままならず投稿頻度はしばらく落ちそうです…。ただほぼ描き上げたラフなどはいくつかあるためちょっと文字入れてアップくらいはしたいですね。週1くらいでは…。

悩んだ箇所

年末の遅れは一時取り戻せたのですが、この16ページ目最後のセリフ回しに二日悩んでしまい…

今作は女の子側の内面を（精神崩壊してもらうためにも）ちゃんと書きたかったのであえて男性側のモノローグや、ナレーションは封じていたんですよね。ただ16ページの先からは時間が一気に進むのでナレーションが不可欠になりそうで…。とはいえ最後精神崩壊する都合上振り返り的なナレーションを女の子にさせるのも不自然さを感じてしまい…。両社にナレーションさせるかなどなんとか折り合いがつかないか色々練っていたらどんどん遅れてしまいました…。結局妙案はなくここからは男性側のナレーションをちょいちょい出して進めることになりそうです。ただなるべくリアルタイムの心境っぽく語らせたり、一気に進む時間の中でも女の子に喘がせるだけでなく内面のセリフも気持ち多目に書いて自分の中の違和感を消したらなぁ…と思っております。

さいごに

ご支援のほど誠にありがとうございます。たいへん励みになっております…！折角なので新年の目標とかも言いたいのですが今はまずコミティアが最優先で考えるのはそのあとですね…。それでは今年もよろしくお願いいたします。

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Happy New Year! I look forward to working with you again this year!

I apologize for the long absence. I have been working on it for a long time, but the progress has not been so good.... I've been working on a new book, so I haven't been able to do my daily scribbles and digest requests, so my posting frequency will probably drop for a while... However, I have some rough drafts that I have almost finished, so I would like to upload them with some text. Maybe once a week or so...

The part that troubled me...

I was able to catch up at the end of the year, but I spent two days struggling with the last line of this 16th page...

I wanted to write the girl's side of the story properly (so that she would have a mental breakdown), so I didn't want to include a monologue or narration from the male side. However, from page 16 onward, time moves quickly, so narration seems to be indispensable.... However, since the story ends with a mental breakdown, I felt it unnatural to have a girl narrate a retrospective narration.... I was trying to come up with a solution for having both companies do the narration, but it was getting late.... In the end, I didn't come up with a good idea, and it looks like I'll have to start with the narration of the male narrator. I am thinking that I will try to make the narration sound as if it were in real time, and even though the story moves along quickly, I will not only make the girl moan, but I will also write more internal dialogue to remove any sense of discomfort I feel....

In closing

Thank you very much for your support. It is very encouraging! I would like to say something about my goals for the New Year, but I have to think about Comitia first and then I will think about it.... I look forward to working with you again this year.