Test edit, going up later today.
Added 2019-08-24 14:36:32 +0000 UTCHey, so this is the video, currently unlisted, which I plan to post around 3 pm. I'm currently sending it around to people just to make sure it's good to post. I really would love your feedback, even if it's as simple as "I think this is safe to post today!"
That would really help me along this process. :)
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My first video of yours for which I'm a patreon, dunno how much criticism you want or what sort of criticism you want but here goes: The video is fantastic in terms of content. Makes a solid argument(s) and has tons of great jokes. I have some issues with how you structure it though. Feel like the middle bit where you do all those shows in rapid succession feels unnecessary. You should maintain the same pace as the rest of the video, like say the same short statements but slow it down instead of trying to be the MicroMachines Man. It's a little too fast and doesn't let the message sink in enough. And I'd move the Rocko's Modern life one's forward in the video, straight after you talk about people complaining about how 'political' the new special is, to demonstrate the hypocrisy better. That Ben Shapiro bit, though very funny, also came out of nowhere. A bit of a lead in talking about how Sesame Street first might work better for it so the whole video flows better. Idk, sorry I hope I don't come across as a dick, first time I've viewed one of your videos super critically and most this stuff is more how I would structure a video essay, dunno if you feel like this is more your style. It's safe to put up, don't think anyone would complain or anything, just think it could be improved is all. Still a great video with the points you make though, forgot about that Recess episode.
J Singh
2019-08-24 15:11:26 +0000 UTC
