Side-story 1 : Crossroads - 1 to 15
Added 2024-10-14 11:42:17 +0000 UTCHey you,
The first side-story begins with these fifteen first pages. This story will immerse us in the new life of the inhabitants of Dunendar, and help us understand how they accepted the changes.
I hope you like Adelya, as we will follow this character throughout the entire story !
This story will never go public, it is entirely reserved for you my patrons.
See you soon !
Comments
Thank you for this ! Very much :)
Argaulix
2024-10-22 17:14:14 +0000 UTCThere is nothing wrong with stereotypes in this situation. I'm a big history buff humanity reacts and make similar bad or good decisions through out history. I'm not religious but there is a lot to be learned about human behavior from various text and customs/traditions. Like the seven deadly sins. Pride, Greed, Lust, Envy, Gluttony, Wrath (Anger),Sloth. Don't sell your skills short! Your doing a good job telling a story! Look through the list above and you have ticked off most if not all. That list didn't originate from a god entity it was an observation of human behavior and what causes us to fail. Avaltin's pride and wrath gets him killed as there was no direct threat from the pig men. Story telling is as old as humans just the tools and presentation have changed. Keep up the good work and we'll see how this all unfolds...
RCH
2024-10-22 14:37:52 +0000 UTCI’m a novice in writing, so I often fall into stereotypes, like my characters needing a leitmotif and/or a flaw to justify their future corruption. You’ll particularly see this in Chapter 1. But anyway, I can’t develop a complex character in just 100 scenes to reach the erotic situation!
Argaulix
2024-10-21 21:19:06 +0000 UTCYou got the point ;)
Argaulix
2024-10-21 21:14:10 +0000 UTCNice start! Like the characters and the setup. Adelya, with her strong desire for children I can see her making some questionable decisions. Corruption!
RCH
2024-10-21 16:00:53 +0000 UTC
