Ellori, the Ero Witch of Parthun - Chapter 126

Cool :) - Still post thoughts etc when next free, and rest when have time do other stuff ! Wish could kept up & commented up to now like before Sorry seem rantish above comment (but was really hoping & wanted comment before this chap, plus way back, that they Def had to be using BC as sensible smart thing, plus like rest your story) - Prob obv. got few things say & not so happy on presenting & dropping Priests irresponsibility etc here all of a sudden lol :( Really feels off sync rest of story, such as mood w setting, open sex with women & pro choice - couldnt help but edit in above comment too b4 see your comment on not fitting the more love, sex & lust aspect of the Demi ver of religion with goddess & teachings, and with it open sexuality & mindness etc. This instead of sudden bomb drop with intro fertility + kids crazy (not that not there part of religion, but that it wasnt be all / big 'point' / partof it now seemling added). Like put Edit- if anything they should be ones teaching & promoting safe sex & sexuality, hell even handing out BC, rather spreading unplanned kids everywhere! Knocking down more constricting social forced norms & beliefs in place Humans, and helping spread 'peace & acceptance' with it (whilst doing other things lol) - Not unplanned kids & probs with it Sum going without on occasion for they themselves wanting kids, the older priests being the one, sum doing so by choise in rituals etc fine & can totally see being part of religion etc; not excluding motherhood but just being responsible about it I mean (+ practical). But them choosing to forego it when they actually have it (and as shown not been neg contrived it that they didnt have it) is huge thing! SORRY for rant!! Def be far small thing on chap as kinda got it all out system; thou obv didnt go into what clearly be numerous probs not using BC etc. Just been only negative & big thorn for me in story; everything else just wanting expansion on stuff, details & suggestions as loved what you had & story, but not enough at stuff etc at points IMO. Just puts sudden weight, downer etc on the whole thing if get what I mean BUT ANYWAY - got get back to it (work stuff etc - no Im not skimping, just break lol) - Love your stuff - just need fix Priest thing alitte bit pretty please *puppy eyes* - & looking forward to more!! Really hope Ellori doesnt get sudden rush to end & only few chapters (been little small too lately), and gets time it deserves- as its been a fantastic work by you!! :D Have great day & best wishes!

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FINALLY caught up after month or so away on El & Micchi !!! From reread 112/113 to here! Will do some proper comments on chaps later, as got to go for now, but as quick bit # Reading 113 with Mira x Ell x Gurk 3p again, its DEF too short!!! Thelia got full 4 pages & part of next chapter (which was less 3 pgs.) !!! Then add point made b4 on News updateMEANIE!!! - but leave that for actual chap comments :P # 125 - NOT happy how presented irresponsibility of Priestesses with Brith Ctrl :( Meant ages back to make a comment aboutthem most prob, definitely using them as be way too ridiculous otherwise- esp. back when with Mira pregnancytheories & how that work considering she IS/WAS on Birth Ctrl !!! [Oh, and i'm sure its not cigerette crap they smoke from effects show & them smarter than that with knowledge etc - it also healthier (adults fine atleast) - but yeah, was lil weirded when Mira was still drinking as shown in Bath house scene & later smoking after preg!! Maybe, hopefully, they have stuff counteract all that, but yeah way irresponsible & esp weird as she feels child is special, wants etc] [Preg - my theory b4 all this dashed sensible use BC preistess, and hope why only Mira suprise preg, is ellori wishing for it happen during that night together in temple & after ceremony giving blessing caused her concieve despite being on BC, whilst other wont be - esp cause Mira only one meant have her Kids!!! :( ] If it was worded & rephrashed (with additions) differenlyt & they would "at times choose to" not use it (personal choice child, older ppl, certain periods + rituals etc) that's one thing. But to not at all when they have the ability too & the consequences- raises too many issues & problems, let alone being able continue do thier priest jobs. I can predict your going say its due magic field lower fertility other area so thats why leave it, which yes be good lore point to have & nice addition put, but even still that shouldnt just be only reason & they ussual do use BC !! Argh, dont have time plus should put with chap lol ! Point being it'd be nice add that they do use BC, just that on this occasion they choose not too; new land, new genes, not expect such results etc etc [they better hav ALOT of priests, or dont know how meant go spreading peace strategy LOL ! ;P ] Thier god to me seemed alot more love & sex than fertility + kids also. Plus part of distinguishing HUman ver. was their sexuality; if anything they feel like the ones who'd be teaching ppl about safe sex & open mindness (not prudes etc), hell even handing out BC potions, RATHER than the ones spreading, & could even see as promoting, unprotected + irresponsible sex everywhere & bunch of unplanned kids!! Again so many probs with that, plus Humans less likely accept (society/culture) with that. It really is the the only big thing that's a real negative in the entire story to me, esp. after did good thing of actually having birth ctrl in your fantasy world & safe sex (NO sense why any wouldnt really lol) The other option &/or factor would be, going back futa magic, that current BC the priest use doesnt work with futa potion dick & so priests infact all knocked up by the female populace ROFL; way spread open mindness & allow women to open up [more one way :P]. But that again goes back to Mira being only one shoud bear Ellori futa babies!!! [Others on BC & Ellori not use blessing when with them maybe cause not happen in thier cases atleast?] =========================== Leave it here - ahh must not keep commenting! got to go! - & put stuff in chaps later! :D - Def hope some of them *cough* like 113 *cough* get expanded more, and still loving your stuff :D PS - How do you feel & want go about stuff like noting & correcting with spelling, grammar, wrong & missing words (+ suggestions) etc in Chaps? Just been noticing alot since sum time after Mira preg annoucement & Capture of corrupted Knight after prostitue undercover work. Can just post in comments if want - though pre type on Text doc where can write properly lol. Have look into it, but other I think is copy gog-docs & alt online then send you? OH the other thing be, find format margins be bit too wide & indents NP; lot of single word lines lol HOPE in good health & best wishes !! :D

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